Here’s a little story designed to inject humor into the lesson.
“Is that your Uber driver?”
Taken out of context, the question is straightforward. Banal.
Could be more exciting if the Uber driver in question were dressed in a zebra costume. Or, steering a Sherman tank.
I wish this had been the case.
It was not.
Repeat writing advice here:
“Never use dialogue qualifiers. They distract from the story.”
Now, continue the story.
Ok smarty, how do you flesh out “is that your Uber driver?”
Let’s try “Is that your Uber driver?” he asked, as the SUV sped past, flipped a U in the middle of the block and came back.
All right, action. Show me. Add depth to the characters.
“Is that your Uber driver?” The California Highway Patrolman asked Ivan, the hog farmer who was my 3:30 Uber fare. He told me about my brush with the law then we got into more important things.
Yes. Ivan raises Mangalitsa hogs. Just this morning, a sow gave birth to a dozen piglets, who will grow up to provide healthy, hearty organic meat. Ivan is moving to Napa to start an organic farm. He has friends in the highway patrol. The pigs will stay in Escondido.
I will never make a U-turn in the middle of the block again.
And never forget the pigs.